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Amazing writing, I was taken the whole way through the psychology of the child and the serenity of the words clashes beautifully with the pace of the surrounding action ! loved it, thank you

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Thank you so so so much Imane. It means a lot 😭

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SO good — so alive and honest. (And childlike without being saccharine or condescending, to either the characters or the reader.)

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Thank you so much Faith, I’m happy you thought I didn’t overdo it. It truly means a lot coming from you!!!🥹

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Yeah, your writing engages the senses in a very calm and pleasantly deceptive way. Thank you

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Wow! Thank you so much for the comment. That’s exactly the atmosphere I aim to create, just casually, pleasantly deceiving the reader, haha. Glad it resonated with you! It really motivates me to keep working and getting better ☺️!

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Great work! You've got a talent for character and dialogue.

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Thank you Ben, this truly made my day.

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Great story, compelling dialogue!

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That’s such a nice compliment. I am very happy you liked it, thank you!

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Lovely story, Hassania. Makes me want to hear/read what happens next.

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Thank you Anthony! I don’t have a continuation to the story (yet?). I appreciate your comment!

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That’s the beauty of a well told story: the reader is satisfied but still wants more.

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This struck the right balance of internal dialogue and action. You feel like you're moving at the same pace as the characters and not wanting them to hurry up.

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Wow! Thank you, I’m happy it was a good read. This means a lot.

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It was a good read! Looking forward to more of your writing.

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Really good, captures the chaos of a child's interior

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Thank you, Matt! I am so flattered, as I highly admire what I've read of your work

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Thanks, you left me a really nice comment so I wanted to do the same

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